Dec 18, 2018

Broken Love: Chapter 4: First Time for Everything....


Edited: Mar 24

To all the Shippers out there, I think you're really going to like this chapter XD



Whisperfrost watched the colt leave. Her ears drooped as she crouched beneath her mother.

Twistwing has dismissed everyone, but he still mumbled a few things to Ravenleaf. Whisperfrost dragged her eye away from the colt to watch her mother.

Ravenleaf's expression changed from serious to very serious, then soft and understanding, then unreadable and then finally back to serious. Her last serious expression didn't look all that serious. Her eyes were big and bright and she stepped lightly. Once Twistwing had finished talking, he nodded once then lifted off with a mighty kick and soared over the heads of the pegasi, meeting another captain on the other side of the valley to go patrolling for the afternoon.

"Come on, dear. Let's go." Ravenleaf said, turning and following the same path that the colt took. "Momma!? Where are we going? Can I have lunch?" Whisperfrost asked quietly, but stopped talking when they neared earshot of the two captains.


"Hehe, can you even fly?" Stonefire asked the colt. "I-I...." the colt stammered, choosing his words wisely, not wanting to get slapped again. "I-"but the other captain interrupted him "Ya know, I don't think you can! I don't think that you can even lift your wings off the ground!" The colt tried to look tough, but you could see that the words affected him. "I can too! Look! I'll raise this wing!" and the colt easily lifted the smaller wing off the ground, while the larger one draped useless on the ground. "Yeah. You might have picked up your normal wing, but can you pick up the overgrown feather?!!" Stonefire laughed. "Honestly!" chuckled the other. "Look! His wing is almost as large as mine!" And the stallion placed his wing next to the colt's to compare. It was true. The colt's left wing was almost as big as the captain's. The two stallions were wailing with laughter as the colt crouched down with an unamused look.


"Mother?" whispered Whisperfrost. "What-" but Ravenleaf shook her head at her daughter to silence her and Whisperfrost ducked behind Ravenleaf.

Ravenleaf cleared her throat, trying to politely interrupt the laughing stallions. They didn't hear her over their own whinnying, so she did it again, only louder. The two stallions paused briefly then continued laughing. They obviously heard Ravenleaf; they just didn't care. Now, Ravenleaf was angry. She pinned her ears, her eyes growing hard. "ENOUGH!!" she bellowed, immediately quieting the stallions and making the colt jump. She folded her wings neatly and her face resumed its normal gentle look. "Stonefire, Redfire, thank you, but I can take him from here." Redfire looked at Stonefire and said, "Bu-but Twistwing said-" Redfire started, but was interrupted by Ravenleaf. "I know what Twistwing said. But, he told me otherwise. You are to hand the colt over to me." The stallions reluctantly stepped aside. The colt was standing up, trying to fold his wings in the same way Ravenleaf had.

Ravenleaf took a step toward the colt and lowered her head. 'I know this must be new to you. I know that your a little scared and these two nitwits didn't help, but you are to follow me, okay? Are ya hungry?" Ravenleaf whispered in the softest voice she had. The colt grinned at the mention of food and nodded his head vigorously. "Good! Then you and I will get along great." She said.

Ravenleaf suddenly swung her hips away, revealing Whisperfrost. "This is my daughter, Whisperfrost." The colt stared at Whisperfrost and Whisperfrost stared back. "Hello!!! I'm Alderflare! What's your name?" he asked, taking a step towards her. Whisperfrost whimpered gently and took a step back. 'I-I'm W-Whisp-perf-frost-t..." she mumbled, shrinking away from him. "Whisperfrost? Great name!" he said in such a friendly voice that Whisperfrost couldn't help but to look up at him. Their eyes met and Whisperfrost saw his eyes slightly widen. "He saw my blind eye...." She thought. Embarrassed, Whisperfrost turned her head away. "Cool..." she heard him mumble. She breathed in a quivering breath. "He thinks my blind eye is cool? Why? It's the most lame thing in Anok! That's like saying that Snow herd steeds can fly to the moon. It's so untrue.... I'm so lame...." She thought, sighing.

She heard light hoofbeats and glanced up with her icy blue eye. Her mother was standing over her, cracking an amused smile and beside her was Alderflare, grinning down at her with the happiest smile Whisperfrost had even seen. She felt her own smile gradually form on her lips, until Alderflare and Whisperfrost were both smiling at each other. "First time for everything!" said Ravenleaf, as she walked toward a small patch of grass to graze. Whisperfrost stood up straighter and Alderflare shot her one last smile before zooming off toward Ravenleaf. He started to suckle and finally, Whisperfrost understood what her mother had meant. She whispered to herself "I've got a brother!" then trotted toward Ravenleaf and the two foals began suckling under the warm afternoon light......






(If I have to edit it, I'll do it later, gtg shower)

Dec 18, 2018

Btw, if you guys don't get it, then all with be revealed in Ch. 5!!! But, TBH this chapter isn't as good as the other ones. 1st: I was in a hurry to finish it. 2nd: I didn't know how it was going to go. I sort of made it up as I went along, unlike the others that I had a plan for the plot. But, i think ch 5 will be better

Dec 18, 2018

Awesome!!! This is really Awesome! Can't wait for more! :)

Dec 18, 2018


Dec 18, 2018

This is seriously an amazing story so far, and I can't wait for more! Though, I would like to point out that Redfire is the name of a former Desert Herd captain who makes appearances in Landfall, Windborn, and Across The Dark Waters

Dec 18, 2018

Normally I'm not a shipper, but this is SOO OBVIOUS. Like Morningleaf and Star, they're milk siblings! Match made in the Golden Meadow.

Dec 18, 2018

This is amazing and emosewa! Can't wait for more, its like reading a book I really like!

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