Aug 7

Outcome of Storyline

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So this is actually Gypsyvanner002 from a different email. But I've noticed several things in the Guardian Herd series which could have been completely different if it had been for one small detail. The first one occurs when Star is almost a weanlong and Mountain Herd stallions take him to Rockwing. Why didn't Star tell Thunderwing? Trespassing into another herd's territory is forbidden and that could start a war. Second stealing a newborn is unheard of in Anok. Third Rockwing tried to force a pact with him. So really it should have been all the other herds rallying with Sun Herd against Mountain Herd.

 

The other detail is when Sweetroot found the death berries when the herds were trapped in the interior why didn't they gove them to Nightwing. Star pointed out that Nightwing's healing powers were weak which is why he looked thin and coat dull. Nightwing would not be able to heal himself against the poison and when he dies then the Icewarriors and Petalcloud could be defeated.

Lol, Nightwing be like, *starts to feel funny and looks down at berries* "Wha... wait a minuet here... *slowly starts to blackout* "I... think... here... I think... I'm... dying... here..." *bleh,dies* XD That would have been it for me! XD XD XD

Aug 7

Honestly, I totally agree with you. I have a whole RP based off what would happen if Star had not been allowed to reach his first birthday, and it's kinda scary how close it comes in the books to that actually happening. I guess that what make that books semi believable.

I think Nightwing would have known that the berries were death berries....I mean I don't think he's that dumb....but the first one is a very good point! I think he didn't tell Thunderwing because ,at that point, Thunderwing probably didn't care. He was going to execute Star on his first birthday anyway, so he didn't really care what happened to him along the way.

That's what I think

Woah thats so crazy!!!!!!!!

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