(This is a story that I am writing for school. Do you have any feedback? Anything I can change to make it better? What did you like most? I would appreciate any feedback, whether positive or negative.)
Laura gazed at the pale blue wings on her back. Sunlight streamed through her window, making her wings sparkle and shimmer.
She was approaching adulthood, for when she could finally figure out how to ride the currents, she would be declared an adult.
All her friends had grown their wings already, and looking through the window, Laura could see them raising singing their wings and flapping, but not able to get off the ground.
It was so lonely being last. Last to grow wings, and certainly last to reach adulthood, since her wings hadn’t grown all the way yet.
Laura heard her friends laughing, some crying, as a few were able to get an inch off the ground.
Further away from her friends, Laura could just barely glimpse the thick river that divided the faeries territory from the dragons land. No faerie in their right mind would ever try to trespass. The air was hardly breathable over there, and fires were uncommon.
Laura considered trying to fly by jumping out her window on the fifth floor, but from the stories she had heard, faeries who tried to do that usually ended up breaking their wings from the fall.
Laura gazed at her friends again. She didn’t feel like joining them. They would just laugh at her, laugh at her half-grown wings.
She opened the window, letting the fierce winds whip her hair around her face and dry her tears.
Suddenly, screams. Laura opened her eyes, trying to figure out what had happened.
Brittney, one of Laura’s friends, had been carried into the air, but she was being hurtled in the wrong direction. Towards the dragon’s land.
Laura’s friends stood as still as a statue. No one wanted to risk their lives to help Brittney.
If no one else will, then it falls to me. Laura flexed her wings, and jumped out her window.
A strong gust of wind kept Laura from falling and instead held her aloft. Laura curved her wings around the current, hurtling her faster towards Brittney.
Laura let a small grin escape her face. Her small wings and body had actually helped her fly.
The smile left Laura’s face just a quickly as she realized what she was getting into. The dragons were not known to be kind to trespassers.
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Lily, a teenage dragon, watched in shock as she saw the faeries in the air. They were heading straight towards the mountain, and would be smashed against its side in a few minutes.
Lily was known for being too kind and selfless. Before the faeries had been carried away by the air, she had flown away from the others, wanting to be by herself.
Lily knew that she couldn’t let anyone die, whether they were dragon or faerie. She leapt into the air, catching Laura and Brittney in her mouth.
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Brittney screamed as the dragon’s mouth grabbed her and Laura.
“Help!” She screamed, although she knew that no one would hear her. Brittney’s dark green wings trembled in fear.
Suddenly, the sun was visible once more, and the dragon’s tongue pushed them onto the land.
Brittney panted, overwhelmed. Laura trembled, unfurling her small blue wings.
“I just wanted to help.” Lily looked at them with large eyes. “You were going to be smashed on the cliff.”
Brittney gasped, trying to get her breath. “Why would you want to help us?” She asked suspiciously.
“I don’t like seeing anyone die.” Lily swished her long tail.
Laura starred nervously. “We didn’t mean to trespass.”
“You can leave now, if you’d like.” Lily grinned, showing her sharp teeth.
Brittney and Laura starred at each other wordlessly.
“Thank you.” Brittney smiled.
“Come again!” Lily flexed her wings. “I would love having company.”
Laura smiled. She had a feeling that they were going to get along wonderfully.
Beautiful!
AWESOME!!! :)
Nice!!! Love the dragon vs fairy thing!
Awww, I love it!!!!!!
Oooh seems nice! I bet you're going to get an A+