Day Two 1 Day 4 Days Together Part 1
Lightray flapped his wings like crazy, trying to gain balance.
"FLAP YOUR WINGS WITH GRACE SON NOT LIKE SOME INJURED WASP!" Smokeray hissed. Lightray looked down at him and noticed Lightmist wasn't there. While looking down a wind through his wings off. Lightray rocketted down to the ground but broke his fall just in time for him to land.
"Woah, did you see that dad?" Lightray whinnied.
"Oh I saw it.." He whispered. Lightray wagged his tail, he never saw his father outstanded before.
"I didn't tell you to land! Get back up there and fly like a sky herder!" Smokeray rammed his own son, in surprise Lightray gained his wings and went back to learn how to fly and only two days old.
After seven hours of flying and doing loops and dives and tricks, he head back to find his mother. Where was she? Lightray peaked through some dried up bushes near the Red Rock Mountains and spotted her sitting down, Lightmist had her red wings drooping, her head low, her flowing mane above her eyes. Lightray trotted toward her.
"Mama?" Lightray asked.
Lightmist looked at his dear son, revealing a marking in the shape of a hoof on her cheek. Her eyes were puffy from crying. She turned away, not wanting her son to see her like this. Lightray took a step foward, and when he got a better view of the club, the stench of it had Smokeray all over it. Lightray's father had abused her.
"Mother.." Lightray whispered and wrapped his wings around his grieving mother. Lightmist sobbed, and poor Lightray only two days old had to be the strong one, the conforting foal that had to accept his father just hurt his mother, he had to carry the pain, the misery, but little did he know, life with his family will only get worse and worse.
:’( That was so... sad, beautiful, extremely well described, maddeningly suspenseful, and that’s about all of my thoughts on this. Also, amazing. Did I mention amazing?
Will . . . . . .you'll see what happens if you continue reading it but I already them all so........ you might not want too....... XD
No spoilers, but I agree with that last part
WHAT?! Do not tell me Smokeray is gonna abuse Lightmist, HIS OWN MATE, TO DEATH?!?!
This is good but so........ horrific...
if only, but Lightray's telling me differently ;-;
HIYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA x swings warhammer over head and mashes Smokeray into paste x HOW DARE YOU YOU ROTTEN POTATO WITH SOMETHING WRONG HAPPENING IN THE HEAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HEY RAIN, CAN THE "TRAGEDY" BE THAT NORTH AMERICA NUKES SMOKERAY???!!!!!!!?!!?!?
XD
yup happens to the baddies xD
Everyones getting out their hammer's and chainsaws now. >o<
You guys are such amazing artists and writers!!!
Me: -grabs chainsaw and slices Smokeray into sushi- "HOW. DARE. YOUUUUUUU."
Wait... Echomoons War hammer??? Lol
IKR!!?!?.
Oh my pegasus . . . . . . . . . . . . -tears streamd won eyes and runs over and hugs LIghtmist and Lightray- -glares at Smokeray and gets Echomoon's warhammer and beats him to death- YOU SHOULD BE ASHAMED OF YOURSLEF -lays warhammer down with a grieving loko on her face and walks over to Rain and clears throat- Excuse my yelling and that's an awesome but depressing story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Yeah,true. ..But Imagine a story where a young colt stood up to his sire like that. (I mean what if there was like a rebel pegasus!?!?!?!??!?!?
LOL Stardust!! It’s Rainfeather’s story though, so I won’t do that
OH MY PEGASIS!!!! RAINFEATHER THIS IS AMAZING! I loved the way you showed the emotion through the characters actions! Also, it really drives the plot forward, and makes you wonder what's Smokeray's motive!
YESSS!! Flamefrost, great story!
*goes to printing machine/ computer.* "I'm going to need this story out by next week."
*talks to staff* We need Flamefrost on this story ASAP."
P.S That would be great! /I kind of got bored ""
I just read the first line. And..... I'm like why is the sire so mean, but it makes a great character, and it increases tension. Good job!
OMGSH!!!!!!! That's amazingly good short story!!!!!! I'm sorry, Lightray!! I never knw about your father!!
Oh my goodness... now I want the “tragedy” to be Lightmist stands up to Smokeray and kicks him, and Smokeray dies. I doubt that will be happening though