Sorry it took me so long to make guys, anyways, here's the last comment (well, technically comments) from part 2-
Dovefrost:
Dovefrost was on her way back to the foals when she was Bakari and then she grabbed him and put him on her back next to Vida, "No more doing stupid things to save each other!" She shouted to them. Vida laughed, "Yes mother I don't want to ever have to put them in that position again." Her voice was drenched in pain. Her leg was damaged and her side was bleeding.
Vida:
She winced, every turn her mother made caused her to have to hold in a shriek. She pretended that her grimaces were smiles. "So Bakari, how are you doing?" Her heart rate sped up and her breathing started to hurry and she started to pant.
(So...what do you think about redleaf becoming sort of a side kick
(Her sorta, She hates the star foals and just wants power)
(Is there a villain?)
(Note: Shimmerstream is like a sage, They dont call her Shimmerroot because she would not let them so she is Shimmerstream the sage, she is sort of a medicinie mare) (Yes)
(she is in willow herd territory?! That is awesome, cause RedLeaf is Willow Herd!)
Stormcloud:
Stormcloud, sighed, she was flying over to Willow herd to see a mare they call Shimmerstream. Her mate knew nothing of her trip and the other lead mares and stallions did not know either. Her wings cut through the air. Her fierce face did not change at all. She was concered and since Shimmerstream could see into futures some what there was where she went. She reached the border and crossed it not worried at all about the guards. They were foolish to try to stop her. She reached the land where she had guessed Shimmerstream lived and she brayed, "Shimmerstream come her! I am Stormcloud the lead mare of Sky herd and I comand you to obey."
Shimmerstream:
Shimmerstream sighed and Whinnied, "Adakitewing, Can you help me please, Stormcloud is here to see you." Then she went back into the cave and ignored the lead mare
Vida:
"I do not like him." She hated her self, she caused so much pain to everyone. "I think I am going to go back to Sky herd and...... And have Strikewing finish me off....... You and Thea can deside who gets him, I dont want him." She cringed inwardly at the lie she told her best friend. She hid how she felt. She dropped her head and tried to eat but she was too depressed. She silently sobbed, her tear flowers sprouted and she stamped them down so Iden could not see her crying. They left the ground burned but she ignored it. She wanted to leave but She could not hurt Iden that way.
Bumbleberry:
Bumbleberry trotted away from the other colts. He saw the colt who could not fly and he trotted over to him. He let his wings droop, he could fly but not well and it hurt him too fly. "Helow, Bakari. Are you sad, please dont lie to me, I can sense your feelings, tell me please." He tried to look kind and make Bakari not feel bad.
(Yes poor Bakari, 2 awesome (Thea and Iden) fillys and 1 hurting filly (Vida) like him. When will life get easyer)
RedLeaf (Raphaels mother, Willow Herd)
11 months ago
âThe...the...the ice tigers!â RedLeaf fake sobs, âThey took my baby!â These fools will beleave me! After all, what kind of mother chases her baby into the wildernes? Me! âThey just...appeared out of no-where!â Inside, she grins Now that they feel sympathetic, they will give me whatever I want. Almost whatever she corrects Then, with enough hard work, I will be the lead mare! Jadecloud wonât know what hit her, and adakitewing will give me power!
(They have flower tears too?)
Iden:
She watched as Vida ran, then Thea, then Bakari. She felt more abandoned now then she ever had. She realized both Vida, and Thea, liked Bakari. And them seeing her and Bakari together, must have left them heartbroken. But they had it all wrong. Bakari didn't care for her. Especially not after he ran off like that. He was just being a good friend. looking out for another friend. She decided that Bakari had too many fillies going for him. He had to talk to the others if she ever wanted Bakari to feel better. She flew slowly. She shifted to Thea just in case Vida were to run away from her. She found Vida. Landed and din't make eye contact. She shifted back to herself and held back tears.
"Look Vida. I know you like Bakari and you saw us together. But he doesn't care about me. He was just checking in on me because I," she stopped herself before she told the truth" I hurt my ankle. He was just being a good friend. It's time one of us lets him go before he is overwhelmed. And I might as well be the one."
A few tears escaped her mismatched eyes and matalic white flowers sprouted. She quickly stomped them out and looked away. She couldn't bare to make eye-contact with her sad friend.
Raphael
Raphael smiles at his new brothers. This is definitely where I belong. With my new brothers he thinks. He smiles broader.
( ;( Poor Thea and Vida and Iden..... NOT TO MENTION POOR BAKARI! XD Just kidding lol )
Bakari:
He felt a pang of remorse when Thea, too, flew away. Why was everyone leaving? Why did they all loathe him to such an extent? It appeared he could only trust and count on his cousin. Even with this conclusion, he couldnât shake the feeling of being utterly alone. He had no other friends, didnât feel inclined to make any other colt friends, and he didnât have a family to protect him.
The thing he didnât realize, was that the foals of Shadow Herd were his family. And he was leaving them as he muttered an apology for intruding on Idenâs space and galloped away, his pathetic wings dragging out behind him. No more fillies, no more anything, he thought to himself, his mind made up.
He didnât know that it would come so soon.
Thea:
She watched as Vida ran. Run away from her and run away from Bakari. She suddenly felt miserably alone, again.
Thea huffed and angrily wiped away her tears, "Whatever..." But, 3 tan colored flowers sprouted at her hooves and she stared at them for a second, remembering when Bakari braided one into her mane, but the memory just brought more pain and she gritted her teeth and stamped the flowers out.
She composed herself-building her walls and guarding her heart so no one could get in.
When she finished, she looked up at Bakari, her expression showed no emotion and looked almost lifeless, but in her eyes there was a world of pain.
She snorted harshly at Iden, then turned her back and flew away in the opposite direction.
Thea soared as high as she dared, the planet started to curve beneath her hooves. The air started to get thin and her breathing turned forced and rough, but she didn't care.
A wiser pegasus would've slowed down and fly lower, but the thought only made Thea fly faster.
Bakari:
His head shot up at the sound of pegasi, and was thoroughly surprised to see both Thea and Vida land. Then, Vida dashed off, and a strange series of fire flowers followed in her wake. Now two of them were crying! He fell into a feeling of dismay, while his expression betrayed nothing. He stared at Thea, and then at Iden, and then stared at the trees in front him.
Vida:
Vida grabbed Thea's wing in her teeth and landed her, "Thea. I get it. I hate my father." She spat the word, "We are sisters. nothing else matters. Dont stress. Lets go back to the other foals." She walked slowly so Thea could keep up, she saw Iden with Bakari and she stumbled back saying, "I need to go eat sorry Thea!' And she darted as far away from them as she could. She was scared Bakari had seen her and she kept running. Her tears left a trail behind her and she could not stamp them out
Silren:
She took in a deep breath, internally tormented with emotions, but she put on a smile as Raphael asked Anblick this question. She found it cute, how all of them were promising each other to be brothers. She, on the other hand, already had a cousin, and didnât need anymore siblings.
Bakari:
His eyes narrowed at Idenâs lie. He inspected her leg and snorted. âYou appear to be fine. Now, tell me what is really going on, Iden. I wonât stop asking until you tell me, even if I have to wait until I am old and gray,â his voice was hard like marble, but his face still held that same cool calm. His eyes, on the other hand, sparkled green with emotion.
Raphael
Raphael gallops to bumble berry and Anblick, full after eating with Frayan. âHi!â He nickers breathlessly. âSo...if me and bumbleberry and you and bumbleberry are brothers...are we brothers?â he looks at his hoofs and looks back up. i really hope he excepts. He was so shy when I nuzzled him...Raphael thinks.
Anblick:
"Bumbleberry!" He nickered, enveloping the colt into a hug. "Good to see you!" He grinned before releasing the colt. He looked back to Silren, sending her the same innocent and care-free grin that a newborn would show his dam after his first flying lesson. He swished his tail, still concerned about what Silren saw, but he knew that he would support her, with very piece of love in his heart.
Thea:
She smiled and nodded in agreement, then her expression deepened as she started thinking about every problem she had in the world. "Why is life so stupid!? Why-why does life HATE ME so much!??? Why does life give me so much pain, ALL THE TIME!!???" She suddenly blurted out, her eyes close to tears and her muscles falling limp-as if she was giving up.
Thea inhaled a shaky breath, trying to compose herself, "I'm so sorry, Vida. I'm going through a lot right now..." She mumbled, thinking about her deceased mother and the total jerk of a father.
Thea craned her neck higher until she was squinting at the sun.
She didn't know why- but she felt she had some connection to the sun. She didn't know what it was or how to describe it, but the sun gave her warmth- it gave her a meaning to live. At this moment, she didn't know what that meaning was, but she hoped it was more than just pain.